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QMC: Round 2

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There is so little time. Morpheas leaves her footprints in miles of black sand, boat long abandoned. Three of her ribs are broken; an illusion hides her ruined face. She carries her baby. Between pained breaths, she asks him what kind of person he is. He tells her tales of cowboys, rocket ships and finger paint.

Her body begins to fail. An explanation, an apology, a plea for forgiveness—she has practiced this goodbye many times. But faced with him, she only thinks of one thing:

"I love you."

She hopes it is enough.



Ambulance lights glitter on the jagged teeth of broken windows. A police cordon surrounds the diminishing husk of a primordial nightmare, buried in the remains of 33rd street.

It is a place she tries to forget but visits often in dreams.

"None of this is real, you know." Her husband slouches, hands in his pockets. They wait behind police tape. "You've been deluding yourself. I think it helps you cope."

Here he is neither devil nor a saint, just the truth. She hates it. "He was—is—real. I have to find a way back to him. I saved him—"

"—And you'll keep on saving him, in a million terrible worlds. It doesn't mean anything. He's gone. He never was. You gotta wake up."

Her world shatters; the fragments melt like wax. Tears roll down her cheek as she offers her husband a heartbroken smile.

"I know. But I can dream, can't I?"
My Round 2 for the Quarter Millennium Challenge.

This is draft number three. I think I'm getting to a point where I'm happy with it, but expect a few changes here and there. Similarly, if you have any suggestions, please let me know! I really need all of the help I can get.

That said, given that I might not proceed to the next round, I wanted to give Morpheas some closure. I hope it answers some questions—not all of them, but a few. The next installment, if I'm lucky enough to proceed, will finish tying things up.

I really like Morpheas. I think I have plans for her.

Word Count: 246 according to Open Office.
Prompt Used: Metamorphosis 1, by Philip Glass. Really, how could I not use it? I hope my use of the theme is evident.

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thelittlemissus's avatar
This entry made me so sad, and also reminded me of Ludo's "Morning in May" more than a little!

I wouldn't know where to begin giving you advise, you already deliver so well in imagery and emotion. I want to see more of her journey, even though it's a terrible, heart-breaking one.